My main concerns: not in order of critical importance..
1. That people think this is good writing. 2. That it was put to press sans ANY editing, straight off the fanfic source document ( legal issues? fuck it, Meyer HAD to have been paid off IMO.) 3.That people wanting to dabble, will see this as a template for normal sexual relations, of which BDSM can be.
And its that last one, that gets me. That now anyone INTO any aspect of BDSM or even just not quite vanilla....
That it does set up this horrible horrible scenario as a normal situation, leaves me wondering now will the people who want this for less than egalitarian purposes ( and in my view, BDSM and all its flavors should be, must be, the balance has to be there), are going to find it a nice little hunting ground and basis for abuse.
That Ana/Bella is this gog eyed newbie virgin is also epic horrible, not in a shaming way, but that the author thought it a clever trope.
That Edward/christian just abuses on her ( I found the orig fanfic online, it is, save for name changes, exact and identical, i won't pay for such garbage), that he ignores her wishes, her needs, no care, no anything, I cannot even comprehend. the character has utterly no...will. no self esteem. Its horrible to read. The tampon scene, I might be insane, but that would be incredibly painful and dry, for her. He doesn't care. Its edgy! its taboo! He mentions FISTING and Anal sex, and "train her ass"....well, no. Asses don't need to be trained like a puppy but if he's the sort to just use her as he pleases, its a massive damn red flag.
I am no hardcore girl in the "scene". But I wager this woman did next to NO research, no reading, made zero attempt at understanding the psychology of sex, dominance, BDSM, and the proper USE of any gear. Flogging a pregnant belly? Jumping fuck WHAT?
That he completely utterly goes off the deep end screaming abuse when the character winds up pregnant, belittling her, is the hallmark, IMO of an abuser.
And so what we have isn't this slinky sexual fun tale, its this horrible horrible story of an abuser and his victim. Read a crime novel, and you'll see "shades of", because its exactly that.
I'm well inclined now to add to my novella/novel, which is very much a safe, sane, equal, rational BDSM tale, a page on "here's resources. Educate yourself if you're going to be dabbling, because I do not want people to get hurt." I am meticulously aware of making sure none of the scenes read creepy or abusive. I really want to raise the damn bar from the depths where this fool has set it.
( and oh, the editing. Iced water: no. its "ice water." And an audi isn't a particularily high end car. nor is "twinnings tea", paracetamol is a britishism, used by two apparent americans. its Louboutin, not Lobatan or whatever multiple misspelling. And on and on. This woman SHAT out a fanfic, and if that's what trad publishers are gunning for now, I'm pretty much done with traditional publishing methods. Not one single effin edit.)
And yet people are reading it for fun, and ideas and fantasy. Good gods. this isn't Tolkien, this is things people DO in real life. And mark my words, someone's going to be stupid and get hurt.
Your story, non, your history, is exactly why this thing red flags all my red flags and then goes out for MORE red flags.
I have to wonder if the author really "researched" with her husband. She coyly mentions it but I strongly doubt she's ever so much as done anything past missionary. I really just don't see it. She writes Ana having these impossible one touch orgasms. Leaving any room for suspension of disbelief, and you still have nothing left to go with. I don't expect someone to go whole-hog on it, but come on, try to put some effort into it, EL. ( this isn't uncommon from what I've seen/heard of M/M fanficcers, who just don't understand biology, sex, or physiology in any base sense.)
Fuck. I hate this book. I hate that it's marketed as mommyporn! and openly as "fanfic!".
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Date: 2012-05-06 05:47 pm (UTC)1. That people think this is good writing.
2. That it was put to press sans ANY editing, straight off the fanfic source document ( legal issues? fuck it, Meyer HAD to have been paid off IMO.)
3.That people wanting to dabble, will see this as a template for normal sexual relations, of which BDSM can be.
And its that last one, that gets me. That now anyone INTO any aspect of BDSM or even just not quite vanilla....
That it does set up this horrible horrible scenario as a normal situation, leaves me wondering now will the people who want this for less than egalitarian purposes ( and in my view, BDSM and all its flavors should be, must be, the balance has to be there), are going to find it a nice little hunting ground and basis for abuse.
That Ana/Bella is this gog eyed newbie virgin is also epic horrible, not in a shaming way, but that the author thought it a clever trope.
That Edward/christian just abuses on her ( I found the orig fanfic online, it is, save for name changes, exact and identical, i won't pay for such garbage), that he ignores her wishes, her needs, no care, no anything, I cannot even comprehend. the character has utterly no...will. no self esteem. Its horrible to read. The tampon scene, I might be insane, but that would be incredibly painful and dry, for her. He doesn't care. Its edgy! its taboo! He mentions FISTING and Anal sex, and "train her ass"....well, no. Asses don't need to be trained like a puppy but if he's the sort to just use her as he pleases, its a massive damn red flag.
I am no hardcore girl in the "scene". But I wager this woman did next to NO research, no reading, made zero attempt at understanding the psychology of sex, dominance, BDSM, and the proper USE of any gear. Flogging a pregnant belly? Jumping fuck WHAT?
That he completely utterly goes off the deep end screaming abuse when the character winds up pregnant, belittling her, is the hallmark, IMO of an abuser.
And so what we have isn't this slinky sexual fun tale, its this horrible horrible story of an abuser and his victim. Read a crime novel, and you'll see "shades of", because its exactly that.
I'm well inclined now to add to my novella/novel, which is very much a safe, sane, equal, rational BDSM tale, a page on "here's resources. Educate yourself if you're going to be dabbling, because I do not want people to get hurt." I am meticulously aware of making sure none of the scenes read creepy or abusive. I really want to raise the damn bar from the depths where this fool has set it.
( and oh, the editing. Iced water: no. its "ice water." And an audi isn't a particularily high end car. nor is "twinnings tea", paracetamol is a britishism, used by two apparent americans. its Louboutin, not Lobatan or whatever multiple misspelling. And on and on. This woman SHAT out a fanfic, and if that's what trad publishers are gunning for now, I'm pretty much done with traditional publishing methods. Not one single effin edit.)
And yet people are reading it for fun, and ideas and fantasy. Good gods. this isn't Tolkien, this is things people DO in real life. And mark my words, someone's going to be stupid and get hurt.
Your story, non, your history, is exactly why this thing red flags all my red flags and then goes out for MORE red flags.
I have to wonder if the author really "researched" with her husband. She coyly mentions it but I strongly doubt she's ever so much as done anything past missionary. I really just don't see it. She writes Ana having these impossible one touch orgasms. Leaving any room for suspension of disbelief, and you still have nothing left to go with. I don't expect someone to go whole-hog on it, but come on, try to put some effort into it, EL. ( this isn't uncommon from what I've seen/heard of M/M fanficcers, who just don't understand biology, sex, or physiology in any base sense.)
Fuck. I hate this book. I hate that it's marketed as mommyporn! and openly as "fanfic!".
Augh.
Ok.
Feeling a bit better now.