It was the way that he was flirty that bothered me. Somebody in the thread made a suggestion that it would come off a lot better if he made a comment about your character's poise and grace -- which I agree with (particularly as those are generally things that come with skill and aren't just pure luck of genetics). As it is, it just comes off like your typical bar creep to me.
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Date: 2012-04-03 12:53 pm (UTC)